Well, your story has some inconsistencies you'll need to work on.
First off, you say that God's and Satan's war kicked off when:
The Lord was overcome with compassion and longed to end the suffering of the lost souls of Hell.
Later on, we get this:
God and Satan’s war existed solely among the matter of the cosmos, until the Titans birthed our planet Earth to host life and brought the war from among the stars, to among life forms and among their mortal minds.
So on the one hand, the war starts because of God's compassion for the lost souls in hell. And on the other hand, it existed before any souls even came into being.
Need some editing there.
Could there be any greater conceit, than for someone to believe that the universe has to be simple enough for them to be able to understand it ?
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