.....evolution is NOT in the Bible, therefore your title topic is misleading at best and does you no credit. How on earth can you say that genesis supports evolution and then manufacture a "version" to back up your assertion? If the words that you have quoted from Genesis aren't really in Genesis, then no amount of wishful thinking will put them there. You're fooling no-one but yourself.
Secondly, nowhere in your initial post do you make it clear that you are not quoting Genesis word for word, in fact you deliberately make it look as if you are quoting Genesis. I'm sure this must be against the forum guidelines - misrepresenting your sources.