Somewhere north of 90% of the words are quotes from other websites, not your own words.
If the quotes were of evidence then I might not consider it a problem, but they're just someone else arguing for your point of view. I'd like to see evidence supporting the point of view, and I'd like to see arguments in your own words.
Qualities like beautiful, fast, amazing, etc., are subjective. What is beautiful, fast or amazing to one person is not for another. You need to offer some objective criteria and evidence.
If you decide you'd like to try a rewrite I'd be glad to give it another look.
Your first post in this thread and you're already off topic. I'm not going to coax and cajole you to get on topic this time. Youve done this so many times before, and you've never paid attention to moderation before, so I'm just going to suspend you for a week.
When you come back, if you still want to talk about how nature began then I suggest you find a thread on that topic or propose one yourself.